Revenge is a movie about a young woman who is kidnapped the day before her sister's eighth birthday. As she goes shopping for presents and decorations she is kidnapped and disappears.
Ten years later her younger sister, Nikita, is 18 and heads out for a night with friends for dinner and a movie. As she walks back to her car she is kidnapped. Nikita soon finds out that she's with the same man who kidnapped his sister 10 years ago.
What he doesn't know is that she's been waiting for this moment all her life and is ready to fight him and his men until the very end end. She's ready for her revenge.
FADE IN:
VENDOR MARKET IN SOUTH AMERICA DAY
Ten years later her younger sister, Nikita, is 18 and heads out for a night with friends for dinner and a movie. As she walks back to her car she is kidnapped. Nikita soon finds out that she's with the same man who kidnapped his sister 10 years ago.
What he doesn't know is that she's been waiting for this moment all her life and is ready to fight him and his men until the very end end. She's ready for her revenge.
FADE IN:
VENDOR MARKET IN SOUTH AMERICA DAY
Young woman finds a pretty necklace hanging from a vendor stand and buys it.
CAMILLE
How much is this necklace?
VENDOR
$25
CAMILLE
This would be perfect for my little sister.
It's her birthday tomorrow.
It's her birthday tomorrow.
VENDOR
I will also include this matching bracelet.
You can wear it and give her
the necklace. That way you both
have it.
You can wear it and give her
the necklace. That way you both
have it.
CAMILLE
Oh. Thank you so much.
That's so kind of you.
She leaves the vendor happily and shops at different vendors buying birthday party decorations.
ALLEY DAY
ALLEY DAY
She walks with two bags in both hands. The sun shines on her as she walks through an empty alley. Man comes from behind her and puts her in his car. She drops a bag.
Camera moves down the street and stops in front of a home. Camera moves toward window.
Camera view goes inside the home through the window.
A little girl and boy plays
with toys in the living room while their mother watches them from the couch as she speaks to a police officer.
The mother is worried and crying and the police office is writing down notes.
MOTHER
I last saw her at 11 this morning.
She's wearing a blue dress.
She went to the vendor market to buy
some decorations and gifts for her
sister's birthday tomorrow.
She's wearing a blue dress.
She went to the vendor market to buy
some decorations and gifts for her
sister's birthday tomorrow.
POLICE OFFICER
Have you both been arguing or fighting?
MOTHER
MOTHER
No. Not at all! She didn't run away if
that's what you are trying to say.
that's what you are trying to say.
POLICE OFFICER
I am sorry. It's just that we find that
many girls her age run off to
be with their boyfriends or friends.
Then come home a few days later.
Has she been acting unusual recently?
MOTHER
many girls her age run off to
be with their boyfriends or friends.
Then come home a few days later.
Has she been acting unusual recently?
MOTHER
No. She's not like that. She's always home
with me. She's quiet and doesn't
have many friends. She keeps to herself.
with me. She's quiet and doesn't
have many friends. She keeps to herself.
POLICE OFFICER
Does she have a boyfriend?
MOTHER
No.
POLICE OFFICER
Is there any friends of hers you can call
to ask if they have seen her.
Is there any friends of hers you can call
to ask if they have seen her.
MOTHER
She only talks to three girls at school.
I called all three of them and they last saw her
at school yesterday and haven't seen her since.
at school yesterday and haven't seen her since.
I know something is wrong. She doesn't
just run off like that. Someone took her.
just run off like that. Someone took her.
POLICE OFFICER
We have a few patrol cars looking around the markets
and asking vendors and neighbors if they
have seen her. We are also working
with stores and banks down town to see
if we can find video footage of her.
Mother walks police officer to door and they talk more. Younger daughter looks on and listens to them as they speak.
CAR NIGHT
Mother drives around town and neighboring towns all night with two children in the back of the car sleeping.
Youngest daughter wakes up.
NIKITA
Mom? Where is Camille?
MOTHER
Honey. Don't worry. Go back to sleep.
Mom? Where is Camille?
MOTHER
Honey. Don't worry. Go back to sleep.
NIKITA
Will she be at my party tomorrow?
MOTHER
Yes, sweetie. She will be there.
Yes, sweetie. She will be there.
Daughter goes back to sleep. Mother drives and sobs quietly so children cannot hear her.
Mother stops outside of vendor markets and finds an alley. She looks at a bag on the floor and finds birthday decorations inside.
10 YEARS LATER
NIKITA
Mom?! I will see you later. I am going to
the movies with Alana.
the movies with Alana.
MOTHER
You didn't tell me you were going out tonight.
You didn't tell me you were going out tonight.
What movie theater? What time does the movie
start? And what time will you be home?
NIKITA
Mom. I will be back before midnight.
Mom. I will be back before midnight.
MOTHER
You have your cell phone with you?
Call me when you get there.
NIKITA
Of course mom. Don't worry.
I will call you as soon as I get there.
I will call you as soon as I get there.
I hope this one day makes it to the big screen!
ReplyDeleteThere are only two things I want to mention.
You wrote during the abduction scene: “Man comes from behind her and puts her in his car. She drops a bag.”
Since the abduction is the focus of this scene, you may want to describe it in a slightly different manner. The wording you use makes it seem like he is gentle with her as he “puts” her in his car, but I think you need more forceful language with this part. Instead of using “puts” you may want to change it to “forces” to really describe that this was abduction rather than a nice incident.
The next comment I have to make is when the Mother is driving around and happens on the bag that her daughter dropped. You wrote: “Mother stops outside of vendor markets and finds an alley. She looks at a bag on the floor and finds birthday decorations inside.”
You may want to change “floor” to “ground” to keep with consistency. Most people consider it ground in an alley rather than flooring.
Other than that, I am interested to find out why this man was abducting these girls and how Nikita exacts her revenge. You have a great imagination and I love how you combined your topic into the plot for a movie.